Re: P&P: The Time Slip (part one of 5)

Visually PAINFUL. I'm not opposed to time travel stories and it's compelling tha you want to include BOTH Jane and Lizzy. But, may I suggest a Beta and reformatting.

I stopped reading pretty quickly because it's essentially unreadable. Even presuming you're trying to set a technical sci-fi vibe, your writing is burried under your formatting issues.

Regroup and repost.